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You're the only one who cannot see,
This burning need inside.
This desperate want, this massive love,
I'm always forced to hide.

I want so much to tell you,
Just how you make me feel.
But I'll never have the courage,
To break this vocal seal.

You make me so confused,
So happy, so sad, insane.
And yet you never see,
The extent of all my pain.

I know its not your fault,
It's mine and mine alone.
I'm the one who fell in love,
The fault is all my own.

So I guess this is a plea,
Because you make my brain so hazy.
I need a break from all this hurt,
So please, stop making me crazy.
Eh, I guess I was trying to show how crazy mixed messages can really make a person. I think I failed, this is crap, lol.

Lemmee Know what you think anyway.

Lesbians!

I thankyou in advance for all faves made!

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Red-Lilly Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2011
wow amazing~! i think this speaks to everyone who has ever had a secret crush
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ArcheroftheDark Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2011
Aye, that was my aim. I'm very glad you liked and thankyou for faving ^^
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Red-Lilly Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2011
np hun i simply love ur work^^
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slimjim123 Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2011
you did everything but fail this is amazingly well written and it's beautiful too :hug:
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ArcheroftheDark Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2011
Thankyou! I really didn't want to fail, lol. Thankyou muchly for faving again!
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slimjim123 Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2011
again, you are greatly welcome ^^
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xxcheesexgeniusxx Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2011  Student Filmographer
:D i like this one! funnily "call it off" by tegan and sara started playing on my ipod while i was reading it XD it fits rathere well with the poem i think X3
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ArcheroftheDark Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2011
Ah, I just listened to it and it does kinda fit, yeah, lol. Glad you enjoyed another and thanks for faving ^^
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xxcheesexgeniusxx Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2011  Student Filmographer
haha you're welcome :3keep up the good work as always~
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kassylee Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2011
I like this one! Very good... Really great rhyming too... :)
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ArcheroftheDark Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2011
Thankyou very much ^^ and thankyou for faving!

How are you these days?
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kassylee Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2011
Not a problem~! Um..I could be better...I need to talk to my gf... hbu?
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ArcheroftheDark Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2011
May I ask what's wrong?

And I'm good, kinda ill at the moment (I have pleurisy) so I'm in a bit of pain. I'm ok though, lol
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kassylee Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2011
Just some..weird shit with my sister and stuff...You can note me if you wanted to... Whats pleurisy? I hope its not too much pain
:(
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ArcheroftheDark Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2011
Its inflammation of the lining of the lungs, and unfortunately its incredibly painful, lol, breathing is a bitch. I'll survive though ^^
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kassylee Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2011
:hug: Oh you poor thing!! That sounds horrible! I'm soooo sorry! I hope you get well soon!! :icontamakiplz:
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Deiichi-Seishou Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2011
failed? there is no such word when regarding your poem! love the last two stanzas!
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ArcheroftheDark Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2011
Thankyou ^^ Im really glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for faving!
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Deiichi-Seishou Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2011
always a pleasure
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mean-person Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2011
this says a lot about people who r in love and who r struggling with it. very nice!
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ArcheroftheDark Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2011
It does indeed. Thankyou ^^ and thankyou for faving!
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mean-person Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2011
welcome
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Astralnature Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
You didn't fail. It's great. LOVE IT!!!!!!
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ArcheroftheDark Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2011
Awesome! Thankyou!
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aimini-LA Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2011  Student Writer
nice rhyming
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ArcheroftheDark Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2011
Thankyou ^^ And thankyou for faving!
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xXMcKennasBitchXx Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
This is pretty much EXACTLY how I was feeling when I wrote "Secrets.."
Looooooove ittt! :D
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ArcheroftheDark Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2011
Ah, great minds think alike, lol, thankyou and thankyou for faving!
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xXMcKennasBitchXx Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
You are most welcome! :D
Great workkk! :D
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DingDong-Writer Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2011  Student Writer
This is amazing... Wish I could get it out on paper (or the computer :P) like you do :D
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ArcheroftheDark Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2011
Its easy, you just feel and write and then adjust to make it flow, lol, Thankyou for faving!
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Plazma-Burst Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2011
perfect .. just perfect
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ArcheroftheDark Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2011
Thankyou, and thankyou for faving ^^
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PNAKS Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
your poems show exactly how i feel.
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ArcheroftheDark Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2011
I hope things get better for you! Thanks for faving!
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13iNsAnItY13 Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2011
sums it all up . . add some betrayal and blood, and it's my tragic love life :D thank you for writing this
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ArcheroftheDark Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2011
I'm very sorry to hear that, I hope things get much better for you in the future! Thankyou for faving ^^
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13iNsAnItY13 Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2011
Don't mean to sound all negative, but I doubt they will. It's okay though, I've accepted it!! I just love finding poems that fit me/my situations perfectly!!
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brittneye12 Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2011  Professional Photographer
this is really good!
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ArcheroftheDark Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2011
And thankyou for faving!
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ArcheroftheDark Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2011
Thankyou!
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DarkndAngel9 Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
definitely NOT crap! this is very good! :hug:
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ArcheroftheDark Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2011
Thankyou ^^ That's a relief! Thanks for faving!
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kjtgp1 Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2011
This is not crap this is totally one point to the message you wanted to get across.
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ArcheroftheDark Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2011
You really think so? Ah thank God, and thankyou for faving ^^
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kjtgp1 Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2011
yes I do!!!
You're welcome, always a pleasure!
How have you been doing?
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ArcheroftheDark Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2011
Oh you know, same old same old, been under the weather since I had a bad flu that's going round, it's left me with sore muscles everywhere and a lung infection, lol, lucky me. How about you?
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kjtgp1 Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2011
Oh noooooooo! Feel better! :hug: :heart: I hope you are able to rest up.

I had a cold last week but I'm feeling much better now. I've been busy with school so I haven't uploaded stuff in awhile. So I'm doing that now. I also hope to update my etsy store sometime this week as well.
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ArcheroftheDark Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2011
Sounds like you're busy, lol. What sorts of things do you sell on the etsy thing (totally just wiki'd it) I don't think I have anything over 20 years old lying around my house, lol
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kjtgp1 Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2011
lol yeah *blush*
I sell jewelry that I make. so necklaces, brackets, earrings, etc.
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